Friday, October 26, 2012

Time For Spooktoberfest


Below is my entry for Spooktoberfest.  For this one there are some rules:
  • 300 words
  • Must contain the following words:
    • Razor(s)
    • Jack o' Lantern(s)
    • Ghost(s)
    • Cobweb(s)
    • Cauldron(s)
This is a blog hop, so click on the pic above to see the full list of participants.

I would appreciate any feedback you would like to give in the comments, even if it's the constructive kind.  Here we go:

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Colby watched Gabe snatch a plastic ghost from a porch covered with neon green cobwebs, and punt it across the street where it landed next to a blow-up cauldron. The boy ran, laughing like a maniac.

Colby glanced around, expecting someone to come out and yell at them, but the street was silent. The only witnesses were a trio of Jack o' Lanterns sitting on the steps of a green house.

He found Gabe on the next block standing in front of an empty house with a foreclosure sign in the yard.

“I dare you to go in,” Gabe said.

“No.”

“Scared?”

“Yes.”

“I'm not.”

“Let's just go,”

Gabe made a cry baby face, and Colby squeezed his hands into fists.

“I'm gonna go in.” Gabe climbed the steps and walked across the creaking porch to a broken window. He stuck his head through the opening and looked around before climbing through.

Colby was getting paranoid, sure that someone was watching by now, but this street was even darker and quieter than the last. He waited forever for the other boy to come back before finally stepping onto the porch. “Gabe?

Screams tore out of the broken window, piercing the silence, and sending him shrieking his own cries of terror, off of the porch.

“Ahhhh! Help! Help!” It sounded like werewolves with razor blades for claws had a hold of Gabe.

Colby ran.

He kept running even when the screaming stopped and the laughing started.

“Come back, you big baby!”

Geez, I hate him, he thought as his legs pumped and his lungs struggled for air. In that moment he wished that werewolves were real, just to take care of people like Gabe.

13 comments:

  1. Oh I dislike people like Gabe, although I am partial to the name since my sons name is Gabe. If I was Colby I'd pissed my pants and then ran but running away would have happened. Lol. Great piece!! Thanks for participating!!

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  2. So cute and typical of Halloween pranks. Loved the story. How many times has that kind of thing been done, and peeing pants, for sure!

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  3. great prank, gabe out did himself!

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  4. Hi Jennifer, nice to meet you. Loved the neon spider webs, nice touch. I think this friendship is headed for doom.
    Nancy

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  5. I think Colby should prank Gabe, so he knows how it feels. Good job!

    Thanks for participating in our blogfest. :D

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  6. What's trick or treating without a prank, lol. This was fun.

    ........dhole

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  7. In the spirit and flavour of Halloween! Lots of fun!

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  8. Perfect MG entry. Nice voice. I love what you did with this. I'm a new follower btw. Its nice to meet you!! :)

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  9. Here from the blog hop. I admire anymore who can get an MG voice because I totally fail at it!

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  10. Great story, classic halloween prank!

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  11. Yeah, dudes like Gabe are cruisin' for a brusin'. Or a bloodletting. :)
    Mina's Resurrection Blogfest!

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  12. Nice setup. It really gave me a sense of boys doing boy things. Great job.

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